Friday, May 31, 2013

Our Innocence could Fill a Great Sentimental Novel



Our Innocence could Fill a Great Sentimental Novel

L. Edgar Otto     31 May, 2013

Somewhere between the darkness and the walking into light
a tunnel claimed by garden green, long and parallel our rails and ties

It does not matter which direction we walk, save to walk apart
perhaps to meet again as lines do here together and at infinity

For we age as does the rusting rails, weathered stones, roots
that break our highest pyramid of cycles, planets, years, brittle bones

Where do the fig leaves end as we touch with our phantom limbs
some braces, wooden legs, plastics, wounded we can feel again?

How much depends on that first kiss, first love, world creating time center
or just holding hands, taking time alone to read each others runes

As if to defy time, or sum up our music together awaiting at the end
not taking from our breaths but adding beats, cannot afford not to

Cassocks fill the march yet love here knows no falling leaves where we
left along the way, our love to renew the steeps and found a homeland.

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10 comments:

  1. Rich, rich writing L. Edgar!!

    I must pick three:

    "tunnel claimed by garden green"

    "Where do the fig leaves end as we touch with our phantom limbs"

    "taking time alone to read each others runes"

    I enjoy the tone of this piece and where you brought us visually...very good! Thank you for writing! :)

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  2. Very insightful, if not a little sad. Nice write.

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  3. so musical, so poetical, mmmm..Thanks for such treat!

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  4. "taking time alone to read each others runes"

    My word, that's lovely!

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  5. I really enjoyed your philosophical approach to this prompt, and these words really completed the idea in your concluding couplet.
    ...love here knows no falling leaves

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  6. Such beauty in this. It takes me back to a time of innocence when I didn't even know what to ask in life...I just survived on feelings. Love it!

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  7. How much depends on that first kiss, first love, world creating time center
    or just holding hands, taking time alone to read each others runes

    so sweetly expressed! I also adore the line Kerry quoted. Yes, this is a very wise poem.

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  8. Something so timeless and eternal about the love you describe. I love the innocent zest that is maintained at the end of the cycle:

    "As if to defy time, or sum up our music together awaiting at the end
    not taking from our breaths but adding beats, cannot afford not to"

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  9. Emotion flows from every line ... I could physically feel it.

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  10. OMG, this is beautiful and brilliant. "Our love to renew the steeps and found a homeland." May it be so.

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